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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful, Funny, Old Souldots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBeautiful, Funny, Old Souldots
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    Such a strange woman

    With such a beautiful smile

    A fun, old soul



    Just the right temp of mild



    Shine through love

    In true happiness style

    Return for;



    Meanwhile;



    Anticipation minus anxiety



    The greatest gift you give

    Deep, warm, comfort

    I tell you truly



    Brought this to me you did



    Thank you a thousand times

    Whenever you let me make you smile

    ah…Just to watch your face



    Playing laughter’s sweet music all the while





    Submitted on 2011-01-31 10:47:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      
    This is sweet & fun, something not a whole lotta poems are around here, I've noticed. It also reminded me of a song from the big-band era. Like something Sinatra would belt out. It's feel-good. I also liked the way you spaced & punctuated. It is unusual & mixed it up a little. It's funny how that can make a difference. The only line I didn't like was "brought this to me you did". The grammar is just way off.
    | Posted on 2011-01-31 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]


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