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conversations #19


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 96
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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conversations #19



i'm not (looking)
so tragic
(for an exit) without hope
that (i run into you)
jumping into something

(and listening
to this long story)
seems like
a good idea.
(i didn't want to hear

it's not that i'm sad
(because it's boring)
all the time
(and pointless.)
just at night

(you should)
when i go out
(just be silent)
around a lot of people
that (for a while) i don't know.

i'm afraid
that (you're embarrasing)
for the first time
(both of us)
in my life

right now.)
i'm really alone.




Submitted on 2011-01-31 17:11:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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