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    dots Submission Name: conversations #19dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsconversations #19dots
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    i'm not (looking)
    so tragic
    (for an exit) without hope
    that (i run into you)
    jumping into something

    (and listening
    to this long story)
    seems like
    a good idea.
    (i didn't want to hear

    it's not that i'm sad
    (because it's boring)
    all the time
    (and pointless.)
    just at night

    (you should)
    when i go out
    (just be silent)
    around a lot of people
    that (for a while) i don't know.

    i'm afraid
    that (you're embarrasing)
    for the first time
    (both of us)
    in my life

    right now.)
    i'm really alone.




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