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conversations #20


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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conversations #20



so many voices
(sadly) blend together
(enough into noise)

(i'm here) in this place
again.) becoming static.

a block away,
(i can't make out)
where i started the night off
with (individual conversations)

no one (i can hear)

i was less likely to drink
(the jukebox) alcohol (though)
and more likely to drink (the music)

water (is terrible)
and to be sober (tonight.
in the morning.




Submitted on 2011-01-31 17:17:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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