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    dots Submission Name: conversations #20dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsconversations #20dots
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    so many voices
    (sadly) blend together
    (enough into noise)

    (i'm here) in this place
    again.) becoming static.

    a block away,
    (i can't make out)
    where i started the night off
    with (individual conversations)

    no one (i can hear)

    i was less likely to drink
    (the jukebox) alcohol (though)
    and more likely to drink (the music)

    water (is terrible)
    and to be sober (tonight.
    in the morning.




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