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conversations #21


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 74
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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conversations #21



meeting you
(with red eyes)
somedays (i wake up
and it) seems so impossible.
that it (hurts to be alive)
could be true (in this world.

but what) keeps me going.
(really bothers me) sometimes
(is this,)
when i feel distant
(it's so quiet)
and unapproachable

(except for the traffic)
i wish i knew you
(blaring outside
like) a little better
or ( the end of the world
is coming.) at all.




Submitted on 2011-01-31 17:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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