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    dots Submission Name: conversations #21dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #21dots
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    meeting you
    (with red eyes)
    somedays (i wake up
    and it) seems so impossible.
    that it (hurts to be alive)
    could be true (in this world.

    but what) keeps me going.
    (really bothers me) sometimes
    (is this,)
    when i feel distant
    (it's so quiet)
    and unapproachable

    (except for the traffic)
    i wish i knew you
    (blaring outside
    like) a little better
    or ( the end of the world
    is coming.) at all.




    Submitted on 2011-01-31 17:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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