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conversations #22


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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conversations #22



whenever i imagine you,
(the lights go out
and) you're beautiful

(i'm asleep,) in my mind
(or close to it.)
in almost every way.

(when i wake up)
you're always there
and (i'm alone again)

looking for me
(in a cold sweat)
around every corner

(after a nightmare)
and our lives to be.
(where i always die.)




Submitted on 2011-01-31 17:32:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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