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    dots Submission Name: only the heart keeps a promisedots
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    Author: TalentedChild
    ASL Info:    17
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 19/81/106
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Being a Teen
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    Why did you not try and save my life, you just left me there die?

    Why did you break that promise when you said you've never told a lie?

    Why did you walk right out on me, without even saying goodbye?

    Does it make you happy to know that I'm dying inside?

    Does it make you smile knowing I'd rather be dead then alive?

    Does it make you laugh that every-day I still cry myself to sleep, because you told me you'd never leave me and that was a promise that you'd keep

    Why couldn't you have warned me before you forgotten what we shared.

    Why did you have to tell me you loved me when it was obvious you didn't care?

    Now I've learned that out of everything that I could never be like you,

    one who simply gets off by turning a single heart into two.

    I know I'll never break a promise that I intend to keep, because I know how much it hurts to be alone before I fall asleep.

    I know what it's like to say you'd be rather left alone to die, because I know how much it hurts when someone leaves you without saying goodbye.

    But we all know now I won't ever be like you and lie to everyone you meet, and that's a promise, and unlike you, it's one that I'll intend to keep.




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