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    dots Submission Name: Gift of Intimacydots
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    Author: Transcendancing
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 365/214/35
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       A gift from a friend when I feared a particular kind of eternal loneliness. I should also say that said gift was amazing in its prophecy, for I don't partake of said loneliness anymore...


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    One touch,
    Soft caress.... your fingertips
    Whispers upon my forearm.
    I am smiling again
    Thoughts taking flight.
    A simple gift, though
    So profound in it’s impact
    Within
    I trust,
    I hope, and faith returns.
    You have filled my senses
    Intimacy - so intoxicating
    So sweet,
    Melting deep into my mind.
    Loneliness finds peace,
    Sorrow rests upon patience....
    Your promise
    All this and more
    Awaits.




    Submitted on 2004-07-27 21:51:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have manged to so delicately describe the giving of this gift. There is a trust conveyed here between you and the giver, that in itself is the magic of a gift. That it's given in the spirit of wanting better things for the recipient. This is full of tender words and hope, the language is gentle and true. A very well done piece,
    I enjoyed it immensely. Thanks for sharing.
    nansofasthttp://www.eliteskills.com/happy.gif
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Its always shocking to me how much a litte lhuman contact can chane the world. Course, too little makes the world seem like a very cold place. I have friends who i only talk to on the fone, and altho we bare our souls im not sure I could say they're necessarily more intimate to me than my [censored]buddies ykno?
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. I like it that it could just be that one caress of fingertips you are talking about or much more than that. You give the details so vividly that it seems to be more than that but then if you think about it, just that one touch could be so meaningful. Great write!
    --blt
    | Posted on 2004-07-27 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]



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