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conversations #24


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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conversations #24



(the) shoes scuff
the (diamond) floors (here)
leaving chaotic patterns
like a pollock (is you

and i wish
i knew) painting (you
like a good friend) gone bad
(or a lover) with agemarks
(that i could come home to)

and bent corners
(everynight) leaving creases
(falling into the bed)
that can never be repaired
(after a long day)

even by (missing you.)
a master forger (i am not)

with years of (so alone) practice
(when thinking about you)
reproducing perfect copies.
(thinking of me.)




Submitted on 2011-02-01 17:27:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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