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    dots Submission Name: conversations #24dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #24dots
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    (the) shoes scuff
    the (diamond) floors (here)
    leaving chaotic patterns
    like a pollock (is you

    and i wish
    i knew) painting (you
    like a good friend) gone bad
    (or a lover) with agemarks
    (that i could come home to)

    and bent corners
    (everynight) leaving creases
    (falling into the bed)
    that can never be repaired
    (after a long day)

    even by (missing you.)
    a master forger (i am not)

    with years of (so alone) practice
    (when thinking about you)
    reproducing perfect copies.
    (thinking of me.)




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