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    dots Submission Name: conversations #25dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #25dots
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    it's another friday night
    and i want (the clouds)
    to fall asleep

    (make it feel colder)
    instead of going out

    (and lonelier) tonight.
    (than i want to be)
    i feel homesick

    (i wish
    i could stop writing poetry)
    for nothing in paticular.

    (revealing my inner self)

    except, maybe the idea
    of you. (doesn't really seem
    to matter anymore.)




    Submitted on 2011-02-01 17:35:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's another friday night
    and i want (the clouds)
    to fall asleep

    I can't seem to read this and exclude the parentheses--I want the clouds to fall asleep.
    I like.

    The two parts work together. And I've lived this, and you've made me feel it again.

    ~chris

    P.S. (typo--particular)
    | Posted on 2011-02-08 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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