Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

conversations #26


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1137
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 700



Description:




conversations #26



the urinals here
are so (my face)

art deco (is hurting)
and monolithic
(from concentration.)

everyone talks about them
(these puzzles) in this town
(made of words)

when i was at school
people (and letters)
were speaking of (being
rearranged in) this place.

(no paticular order)

i'm here

(it's) almost (fucking)
every single night.

(with my sanity)
i suppose that i'm lucky

(and my well being.)

in some ways
(i wish i were someplace else.)
and not so much in others.




Submitted on 2011-02-01 17:46:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments



Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



189153