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    dots Submission Name: Wild Flowerdots
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    Author: sandman
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 1644/1440/613
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWild Flowerdots
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    Something so Soft
    But warm and gentle
    Always kind
    But never cruel

    My soul pours out
    A cry for this
    Is she the one?
    I so desire

    Waiting for me
    To be found
    A touch so fine
    But yet so rare

    A wildflower
    she wears in her heart
    She loves me
    I love her still





    Submitted on 2011-02-02 09:31:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this one, but feels incomplete to me. A great and lovely imagery and emotions but the reader me wishes to read more and wishes to relate to it more as well..

    tc,
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    | Posted on 2011-06-23 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      i could only call this piece a description of something "gentle" which i think was what you aimed for... one particular thing i like is that you named it "wild" flower.. because also wild things are usually attributed qualities such as savage and brutal .. you made it gentle.

    - Black Rose
    | Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice and simple, alright; but I'd rather had you expand on the images a bit more.
    | Posted on 2011-02-03 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]
      short&sweet. good write.
    | Posted on 2011-02-02 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple, yet beautiful.

    Love of Christ,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2011-02-02 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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