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Wild Flower


Author: sandman
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Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Wild Flower


Something so Soft
But warm and gentle
Always kind
But never cruel

My soul pours out
A cry for this
Is she the one?
I so desire

Waiting for me
To be found
A touch so fine
But yet so rare

A wildflower
she wears in her heart
She loves me
I love her still





Submitted on 2011-02-02 09:31:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked this one, but feels incomplete to me. A great and lovely imagery and emotions but the reader me wishes to read more and wishes to relate to it more as well..

tc,
v
| Posted on 2011-06-23 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
  i could only call this piece a description of something "gentle" which i think was what you aimed for... one particular thing i like is that you named it "wild" flower.. because also wild things are usually attributed qualities such as savage and brutal .. you made it gentle.

- Black Rose
| Posted on 2011-04-10 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice and simple, alright; but I'd rather had you expand on the images a bit more.
| Posted on 2011-02-03 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]
  short&sweet. good write.
| Posted on 2011-02-02 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  Simple, yet beautiful.

Love of Christ,
Christie
| Posted on 2011-02-02 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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