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    dots Submission Name: Coronadots
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    Author: mae
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 597/644/262
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsCoronadots
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    Like the sun's eclipse
    through a mirror,
    the lengthening shadows
    of long-time love
    compel me to reflect;
    to recall the taste
    of passion on my lips;
    to breathe again the sigh
    of dreams fulfilled;
    and feel heat bloom
    once more on my cheeks.
    But like the glow surrounding
    the darkened sun,
    the brightest part remains.
    As the shadows deepen
    and more of life becomes a memory,
    love lies in the flaming edge.






    Submitted on 2011-02-02 11:57:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that perhaps the first half of the poem sounds like a story or something that is contrived, not all of it, but there's enough that it's a bit of a concorse to get down to the glue.

    for me this section is the part where its the brilliant bit of a poem:

    like the glow surrounding
    the darkened sun,
    the brightest part remains.
    As the shadows deepen
    and more of life becomes a memory,
    love lies in the flaming edge.

    I find that part the most beautiful, the most sensual, the most romantic because it is the lesson, and it is the statement, we read the lines and they will teach us.
    I have never seen love the way you have it, and that works its ways on the heart.
    | Posted on 2011-02-03 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]


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