Description: Hmm.... let's see...it was a cloudy day in Brazil and I was missing home. Just one of those gloomy times you just want the sun to come out and warm you as you sleep and all your problems go away. Well, yeah, that's about it. Enjoy and please, please, please, give me some feedback! Thanks a bunch. Love you all...XOXO dandan
A Plea to the Sun -------------------------------------------
Oh, Sun,
Remove yourself from behind those wretched clouds
That curse your name and nature!
Discover anew the tragedy that lies beneath your command
And revive it with your mercy.
Let there be one day more that basks in the beauty
That has been attributed to your very being,
And let not the distasteful creations of the elements
Hide you from the innocents who depend on you!
Let not yourself be hidden and ignored
But awake, blessed creation,
And arise once more upon this piece of earth
That calls upon your name in need --
Gather your strength
And break through what barriers may come.
Just live as you once were,
And find that peace that adorned your golden crown:
I got a vibration while reading this piece. It seems to me a person was grieving for a lost one. The last three lines reinforced my vibration "Just live again as you once were and find that peace that once adorned your golden crown. Rise again for me,my friend." The poem sounds Shakesperian to me=good.
ahh... this is so bold and big, a call to order! It has a Shakesperean feel, and I can see some guy in tights and a tunic and some big funny hat reciting this for a crowd, shouting out so everyone can hear and for the dramatic effect.
But then the last line hits... so personal, so quiet. Wonderful. Keep it up!
i like the evocation "oh sun".it grabs the attention and really prepares u for the whole poem.the poem makes the sun big but does not focus on the supremacy but makes it appear more "humane" tham it usually is.nice write.oh welcome back from ur vacation
i have to say you are great with words. you seem to always know what words to use. this was a great poem and i was happy to see that you hade something new for me to read keep them comeing lia
Aaah.. it feels good to read a good poem again. Welcome back ya bum! (I mean buddy...) Once again you make me feel small with your word choice and all that good stuff. This is a great poem (nyaaa!) however much I hate to admit it.Good to see ya (through a computer that is...wierd!)
hey. its funny cause i know exactly wat ur talking about but its very different for me cause where i come from (north of india) its really hot all the time and really really bright and sunny, i hate it. we all wait for the rains to fianlly come. but i like the way u write. well done. read some of my work if u have time. i think u will like it. ok, take care ~Anna
Submission Name: A Plea to the Sun
