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conversations #27


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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conversations #27



(the vulcan girl)

i want to climb
the mountain
that, (has me mesmerized)

leading me
somewhere else
(with the way)
other than here,

and (that she moves.)
may be my salvation

(even just reading)
in another lifetime.
(she's too beautiful)

i've yet to live. (for words)

(and we have similar hairlines)
and metaphors.




Submitted on 2011-02-02 17:45:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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