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    dots Submission Name: conversations #27dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #27dots
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    (the vulcan girl)

    i want to climb
    the mountain
    that, (has me mesmerized)

    leading me
    somewhere else
    (with the way)
    other than here,

    and (that she moves.)
    may be my salvation

    (even just reading)
    in another lifetime.
    (she's too beautiful)

    i've yet to live. (for words)

    (and we have similar hairlines)
    and metaphors.




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