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conversations #28


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 86
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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conversations #28



too many old men
(growing up)
remind me of myself

(it's harder to see)
getting older
and (the future)

being alone
(for what it is.)
without you (it's
a series of tests)

i'll be fine
(defining who you are)
on my own (and who
you will become)

i suppose (someday,)
but i doubt it

(if you're lucky.)
because i need you around.
(or else it's a reminder
that) sometimes
there's very little worth

(you're born dead.)
in pointless solitude.




Submitted on 2011-02-02 17:57:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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