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    dots Submission Name: conversations #28dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsconversations #28dots
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    too many old men
    (growing up)
    remind me of myself

    (it's harder to see)
    getting older
    and (the future)

    being alone
    (for what it is.)
    without you (it's
    a series of tests)

    i'll be fine
    (defining who you are)
    on my own (and who
    you will become)

    i suppose (someday,)
    but i doubt it

    (if you're lucky.)
    because i need you around.
    (or else it's a reminder
    that) sometimes
    there's very little worth

    (you're born dead.)
    in pointless solitude.




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