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conversations #29


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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conversations #29



a warm morning
(in the street)
wakes me up,
reminding me
of (slobbering junkies
trying to light)
the spring (up
with wet matches)

and the months to come.
(always fail.

there must be more
to) winter

(life.) is almost over.

(a working lighter
might help) the budding trees

give me (some) hope.
(and a clear mind.)




Submitted on 2011-02-02 18:00:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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