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    dots Submission Name: conversations #30dots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #30dots

    if i could only write

    (this town is) a song
    (becoming smaller)
    instead of (everyday)
    a poem. (that i'm here.)

    sometimes (i'm still alone
    though) all i see
    are words (waiting
    for someone to come along

    and) letters (save me
    from) sentences
    and (myself)

    jumbled up metaphors

    (what it all means)

    alluding the true meaning
    (is a mystery.) within.

    Submitted on 2011-02-02 18:10:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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