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    dots Submission Name: Cyclone Yasi.dots
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    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 778
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this about Cyclone Yasi. It's still happening right now and the noise was just phenomenal. Although areas like Innisfail and Cardwell and such, were strongly affected, where I live (Townsville) was pretty bad too... :S A heap of trees fell over, some in our backyard and also a bunch of power lines went down too... I think I slept through a lot of it though D;

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    dotsCyclone Yasi.dots
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    (This is about TC Yasi, the Category Five cyclone which hit North Queensland. It's just a short ditty of how I felt during it)

    The constant howling of wind
    Like an agonising howl
    Screaming a warning to you
    To not go out.

    Watching trees flail hopelessly;
    Their strong branches are now
    Lifeless limbs
    Controlled by an outer force.

    The rain - oh the rain!
    Sweeps the streets,
    Lashing out on windows
    The sound like Skittles hitting the floor.

    A tree falls down
    Crushes the fence
    As leaves and debris fly around
    Nothing is safe - everyone's tense.

    Where ever you are
    At the packed shopping malls
    Or in your own safe house,
    I hope you are safe, I hope you are well.




    Submitted on 2011-02-02 20:57:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      do you live in queensland?
    man... theyve had it crazy rough the last few weeks. the coverage of the flooding even made it to ethiopian tv... you know stuffs bad if theyre hearing about it in the third world.

    my prayers go out to queensland for sure.

    i gotta say im loving the skittles reference.
    i forgot that they existed so im prolly gonna go buy some tomorrow on my travels though that seems a little insincere to be putting in a comment right now..

    is it true that no one died during the cyclone doing its thing or as a result?
    i heard prelim news after it hit that said there hadnt been any reports though i havent heard much since.

    anyways. i like your piece.
    i like the way you try to put the reader in the way of the storm... describing sounds and feelings so the reader can place themselves under a table or somewhere "safe" while wondering what the damage will be and whether their family will be okay.

    you have used the power of words well in this piece.
    | Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi This is very real vividly and well written. I like it.
    Keep going. Regards Joachim
    | Posted on 2011-02-04 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      It's captures as a brief little moment in time.I wish it was longer but something tells me this is the most impact you've seen from it up close or near by with certain vision.
    The thought of crackling trees falling over with booming sounds of shaking thunder so strong shutting off lights in ones home then surprising the crap out of them as they waste nearly and entire pack of Skittles onto the polished wooded floor of the room starts and revving up their engine of curiosity of natures disastrous weather comes into my visualization binoculars.
    And I see exaggeration in the weather reports about it and hope it just passes on and that everything will end sure enough over time but I think it would be cool to have some kind of "home souvenir' from it to remind you of being wrapped in the anticipation of the storm.Even though weather like that is nothing to play with but you get where I'm saying.
    Puts my thinking on the storm there rather than the storm where I am, because the storm here seems much greater and more mind boggling to survive through than what is here.
    | Posted on 2011-02-03 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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