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    dots Submission Name: Flickerdots

    Author: wilted_flower
    ASL Info:    22 f uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 42/56/28
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    It watches us where we sit,
    Listens, notes, takes it in,
    Records it all bit by bit
    Every virtue every sin.

    It heard that time you lied
    You played on sympathy
    Yes the lecturer cried
    But its heart is empty.

    It will keep nothing for you,
    All secrets will shatter
    Whatever the aim of what you do
    In its mind it doesn’t matter.

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