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    dots Submission Name: conversations #31dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsconversations #31dots
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    there's a painting
    of a (smile)

    woman in the bathroom
    (while you can
    and) smoking a cigarette
    (try no to be so sad.)

    trying to look sexy
    (when there's so little time,)

    despite these surroundings
    (there's little time to be had)
    with one knee up,
    (wasting away.)
    with the other one spread.




    Submitted on 2011-02-04 17:14:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how you take s small glimpse of reality, a moment, and make it timeless. I guess there's beauty even in dirt. :)
    | Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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