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conversations #33


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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conversations #33



i want to see
(the omens of) your eyes

(things to come)
for the first time
(are found in tealeaves)
my darling.

(and hexagrams)
come and find me
(at night.)

before i wither away.
(the oracle is silent)

i wish to know you (just now)
as i would know myself.

(and i am blind)
or at least
the best part of me.
(without a future) is

(i can see)
that (from this point on.
i am lost) too much
to ask for? (now.)




Submitted on 2011-02-04 17:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Haha I really like this schizo style of writing. In this poem I like the second part in parenthesis much more than the first one. But it goes well together as to express the thoughts that flow through your head while holding a conversation.
| Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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