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    dots Submission Name: conversations #33dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #33dots
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    i want to see
    (the omens of) your eyes

    (things to come)
    for the first time
    (are found in tealeaves)
    my darling.

    (and hexagrams)
    come and find me
    (at night.)

    before i wither away.
    (the oracle is silent)

    i wish to know you (just now)
    as i would know myself.

    (and i am blind)
    or at least
    the best part of me.
    (without a future) is

    (i can see)
    that (from this point on.
    i am lost) too much
    to ask for? (now.)




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      Haha I really like this schizo style of writing. In this poem I like the second part in parenthesis much more than the first one. But it goes well together as to express the thoughts that flow through your head while holding a conversation.
    | Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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