Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: I miss those days...dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 671
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 533



    Description:
       blehhhhhhh

    i am bored ): and this is the kind of writing that occurs when you listen to music with sentimental attachments. it's just out of whack.

    bash, bash, bash, because, you know I'll love you anyways (:


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI miss those days...dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Nostalgia

    When a single melody can take you away,
    Take you back to a place
    When things were so good
    And always went your way.

    When a fleeting glance can re-awaken
    that yearning sensation inside,
    A swooping in your belly;
    Nothing was mistaken...

    When a sweet aroma can make you think
    Of that one time, back in the day
    When everything was so simple,
    Gone - with a lonely blink.




    Submitted on 2011-02-05 01:32:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      it seems like moments pass as quickly as they happen...
    and life is just nostalgia..maybe we gather all the moments just to have that keepsake...

    i remember old songs...weird...i hear them and remember one specific incident when i heard them back then, when they were popular..not general..but one specific moment...the glance back in time it's short but lasting at the same time...

    nostalgia is a big part of my life...because i really miss the old days...liked them much better than current days...

    so i appreciate this

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      heres the thing:

    the first time i met my husband i was at someones birthday party in ethiopia. i still have no idea whose birthday it was or how i got to attend but thats prolly not important.
    one of my friends told zook [my husband] that i could sing really well and he pestered me until i sang for him.

    for no reason in particular i sang 'killing me softly' lauren hill styles.
    it kinda became our song. every time i heard it i thought of him and every time i went back to ethiopia to see him he made me sing it to him and his friends and his family and complete strangers.

    so ive been back in nz for 3.5 weeks without him. and its been ghastly. but heres the thing:

    my first day back at work when i was feeling crazy and out of control what song came on the radio?

    killing me softly.

    when i was in the dentists chair waiting for the anesthetic to kick in so i could get my tooth pulled what song came on the radio?

    killing me softly.

    there is power in songs. i dont care what anyone says. and for me that song keeps appearing when i really need him.. when i wanna tell him what happening or just need a hand to hold.
    i dont really even like the song lol.

    so yes... the way music transports us to memories and life moments is wonderful though it can also be painful too.
    and the way those moments of remembery never seem to last long enough is frustrating but... if you listen to the right radio station maybe the song will play again in a few hours...
    | Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Since I am currently at a point in my life where I am constantly longing for what has passed, I can relate with this post. I am constantly reminded of how it used to be, weather it be a tv show, a phrase I hear, a picture I see, or something I eat or smell. brings me back to "the good 'ol days" I love this piece. Well written. I find that sometime the best writing is done on a whim or because there simply is nothing to do. your mind is constantly flowing with random thought (at least mine is) and boredom can allow you to put thoughts to paper/computer. I like it. there is nothing to bash.

    --Oli
    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      I will admit that because of the when format I was expecting something gushy mushy and hallmark.

    considering that this is more form work and therefore more restrictive I think you did very well, you handled the rhyme and meter well: keeping pace, place, and managing to enliven it.

    I take a special interest in kiwi people and started out writing form/loose form, eventually making something of a study of it, but lately I haven't strayed there much. All this infomation to say that your writing here shows lyrical promise.
    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]
      It's refreshing to see something on here with a recognised and standard form rather than just being a practice in free writing! I love the phrase "lonely blink", it's extremely emotive and echoes through everyone who reads it.
    | Posted on 2011-02-05 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    189220

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry