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    dots Submission Name: I miss those days...dots

    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    i am bored ): and this is the kind of writing that occurs when you listen to music with sentimental attachments. it's just out of whack.

    bash, bash, bash, because, you know I'll love you anyways (:

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    dotsI miss those days...dots


    When a single melody can take you away,
    Take you back to a place
    When things were so good
    And always went your way.

    When a fleeting glance can re-awaken
    that yearning sensation inside,
    A swooping in your belly;
    Nothing was mistaken...

    When a sweet aroma can make you think
    Of that one time, back in the day
    When everything was so simple,
    Gone - with a lonely blink.

    Submitted on 2011-02-05 01:32:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it seems like moments pass as quickly as they happen...
    and life is just nostalgia..maybe we gather all the moments just to have that keepsake...

    i remember old songs...weird...i hear them and remember one specific incident when i heard them back then, when they were popular..not general..but one specific moment...the glance back in time it's short but lasting at the same time...

    nostalgia is a big part of my life...because i really miss the old days...liked them much better than current days...

    so i appreciate this

    | Posted on 2011-03-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      heres the thing:

    the first time i met my husband i was at someones birthday party in ethiopia. i still have no idea whose birthday it was or how i got to attend but thats prolly not important.
    one of my friends told zook [my husband] that i could sing really well and he pestered me until i sang for him.

    for no reason in particular i sang 'killing me softly' lauren hill styles.
    it kinda became our song. every time i heard it i thought of him and every time i went back to ethiopia to see him he made me sing it to him and his friends and his family and complete strangers.

    so ive been back in nz for 3.5 weeks without him. and its been ghastly. but heres the thing:

    my first day back at work when i was feeling crazy and out of control what song came on the radio?

    killing me softly.

    when i was in the dentists chair waiting for the anesthetic to kick in so i could get my tooth pulled what song came on the radio?

    killing me softly.

    there is power in songs. i dont care what anyone says. and for me that song keeps appearing when i really need him.. when i wanna tell him what happening or just need a hand to hold.
    i dont really even like the song lol.

    so yes... the way music transports us to memories and life moments is wonderful though it can also be painful too.
    and the way those moments of remembery never seem to last long enough is frustrating but... if you listen to the right radio station maybe the song will play again in a few hours...
    | Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Since I am currently at a point in my life where I am constantly longing for what has passed, I can relate with this post. I am constantly reminded of how it used to be, weather it be a tv show, a phrase I hear, a picture I see, or something I eat or smell. brings me back to "the good 'ol days" I love this piece. Well written. I find that sometime the best writing is done on a whim or because there simply is nothing to do. your mind is constantly flowing with random thought (at least mine is) and boredom can allow you to put thoughts to paper/computer. I like it. there is nothing to bash.

    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      I will admit that because of the when format I was expecting something gushy mushy and hallmark.

    considering that this is more form work and therefore more restrictive I think you did very well, you handled the rhyme and meter well: keeping pace, place, and managing to enliven it.

    I take a special interest in kiwi people and started out writing form/loose form, eventually making something of a study of it, but lately I haven't strayed there much. All this infomation to say that your writing here shows lyrical promise.
    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by theludus | [ Reply to This ]
      It's refreshing to see something on here with a recognised and standard form rather than just being a practice in free writing! I love the phrase "lonely blink", it's extremely emotive and echoes through everyone who reads it.
    | Posted on 2011-02-05 00:00:00 | by wilted_flower | [ Reply to This ]

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