[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: The Deepingdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 337
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1260


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Deepingdots

    I am the darkest
    The night silence
    Sleeping on your lips

    I am the shadow
    The call in voiceless

    The brooding penumbra
    Which cast upon your heart
    The desire
    Of the stars

    I am the following footstep
    Some ghost
    On which your path
    I tread

    The burning night
    Where your love
    Laid out its sacrifice

    I am the dark whisper
    A black ink well
    Into all your thoughts I collapse

    A haunted space amongst your hearts
    A tremor of who
    You really are

    I am the deep
    Into you I fall
    With ripples on a timeless pool
    I hide in every corner
    Of your soul

    I am the darkest
    Of the nascent light
    Kept in an ever flowing cup
    The wine upon a parched kiss
    Of love

    And burned within the hunted flame
    Every bead of sweat
    Breathed within passions net
    As I lift from such a quivering tongue
    The evanescence

    You have not known me
    Save in the deepest realms
    Of unremembered

    Submitted on 2011-02-05 13:29:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    written by Daniel Barlow
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Summer written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Push written by JanePlane
    Fasade written by jackz
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Bond written by saartha
    written by Daniel Barlow




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]