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    dots Submission Name: The Deepingdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Deepingdots
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    I am the darkest
    The night silence
    Sleeping on your lips

    I am the shadow
    Dreaming
    The call in voiceless
    Speaking

    The brooding penumbra
    Which cast upon your heart
    The desire
    Of the stars

    I am the following footstep
    Some ghost
    On which your path
    I tread

    The burning night
    Where your love
    Laid out its sacrifice

    I am the dark whisper
    A black ink well
    Into all your thoughts I collapse

    Silent
    A haunted space amongst your hearts
    A tremor of who
    You really are

    I am the deep
    Into you I fall
    With ripples on a timeless pool
    I hide in every corner
    Of your soul

    I am the darkest
    Of the nascent light
    Kept in an ever flowing cup
    The wine upon a parched kiss
    Of love

    And burned within the hunted flame
    Every bead of sweat
    Breathed within passions net
    As I lift from such a quivering tongue
    The evanescence

    You have not known me
    Save in the deepest realms
    Of unremembered
    Dreams




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