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    dots Submission Name: Giving updots
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    Author: Di Re Rakord
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 130/125/30
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    All thru out my life my bodys been torn asunder. My brains been racked with plight, my soul it booms with thunder.

    All these years have done, is show me how big a farce love is. All these drugs that won, prove how stupid my heart is.

    I can not rest, ive forgotten how.
    Its all in jest till someones down.
    Ive tried and failed to keep my cool,
    Ive ran my mouth and acted a fool.

    I ask for forgivness this one time, how am I supposed to handle this spite? Ive dont my best to stay in line, but today... today I feel like giving up this fight.




    Submitted on 2011-02-05 20:55:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      never give up, never surrender. good write.
    | Posted on 2011-02-07 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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