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    dots Submission Name: A Hiss in the Nightdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsA Hiss in the Nightdots
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    In an opiate dream of Zanzibar
    she moves in sinuous measures.
    Her partner for this dance as
    sinuous as she
    a python from a tale
    of Indian sorcery.
    A lover once of not so supple form
    he thought by guile to steal
    what was not meant for him to wield.
    It was with savage sorrow
    she so spared him death.
    Now orchestrated moans are
    all that hiss upon his breath.
    He writhes in dull delight an
    ornament of infinite sighs.
    He slides his caress through
    feverish flame of night and
    spends his days drenched
    in drowsy scents of a dying
    opiate glow. And he dreams
    he dreams he is yet a man.




    Submitted on 2011-02-06 05:22:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A lover once of not so supple form
    he thought by guile to steal
    what was not meant for him to wield.
    It was with savage sorrow
    she so spared him death.


    I want to know the details of this part--it's like a crucial part of the back story is missing. I think maybe the word 'wield' is throwing me off, making me think there is something other than he tried to seduce her and she turned him into a snake. The rest shows your usual skilful manipulation of sound.

    ~chris
    | Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason I instinctively shudder at the potential for mind numbing pain that can be brought about by the animus of a woman so inclined. I was once told that women make the best torturers. Perhaps there is good reason for that.

    | Posted on 2011-02-07 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      An erotic tryst of salient salaciousness their exogamous anabolic was the embodiment of fecund avant-garde as they writhed in their wanton dance . Their wayward embrace exceeded the confines of finite infinitum as they bathed in the refulgent translucence of their opacities intensities . To greater heights their passion soared as they observed the apex axis crux of cored . Futurities' pandemic visage so chained to yesterdays embrace , a natural occurrence of filigree and lace . Evolving like a need fulfilled he soon regained his manly build . She spends her days in ecstatic revelries so pleased to tease his demented reveries .
    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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