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    dots Submission Name: Within my written minddots
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    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Just my view of how my poetry is formed


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    dotsWithin my written minddots
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    It's due to this empty page,
    aching for the spill of ink,
    onto its crisp unwritten face.
    Waiting for emotions to spill
    from within the creators dreams,
    and nightmares in a bloody mess,
    of anger and fear, or a misty hue of
    complications...
    Pages unwritten come to life as the ink
    touches the surface in a rush of black and red.
    The pages in which I write,
    breathe in the color and spread it from
    it's surface. the words and images
    in which I bleed shall be read and remembered
    by their brilliance and meanings.
    The beauty in which they form is carried by the
    imagination and passion for what I live.




    Submitted on 2011-02-06 18:30:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      quite like this one...

    (should be "creator's dreams"

    but the writer's block theme works..just read another poem on the site about that...i like poems about writing a lot.

    i like the black and red ink effect here...

    black for the ink itself but red? wow..that could be blood, red for the heart, but also red ink for corrections..as if i am going to write my feelings and someone is going to edit them..or criticize them with the old red pen...

    maybe i am self-correcting because i don't like where the writing comes from...

    but, in the end...there is such hope in this piece...that all the pain i suffered caused some writing that will last, will be read long after i am gone, and might help others in some way...when they read from someone who has been there.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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