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    dots Submission Name: Within my written minddots

    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Just my view of how my poetry is formed

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    dotsWithin my written minddots

    It's due to this empty page,
    aching for the spill of ink,
    onto its crisp unwritten face.
    Waiting for emotions to spill
    from within the creators dreams,
    and nightmares in a bloody mess,
    of anger and fear, or a misty hue of
    Pages unwritten come to life as the ink
    touches the surface in a rush of black and red.
    The pages in which I write,
    breathe in the color and spread it from
    it's surface. the words and images
    in which I bleed shall be read and remembered
    by their brilliance and meanings.
    The beauty in which they form is carried by the
    imagination and passion for what I live.

    Submitted on 2011-02-06 18:30:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      quite like this one...

    (should be "creator's dreams"

    but the writer's block theme works..just read another poem on the site about that...i like poems about writing a lot.

    i like the black and red ink effect here...

    black for the ink itself but red? wow..that could be blood, red for the heart, but also red ink for corrections..as if i am going to write my feelings and someone is going to edit them..or criticize them with the old red pen...

    maybe i am self-correcting because i don't like where the writing comes from...

    but, in the end...there is such hope in this piece...that all the pain i suffered caused some writing that will last, will be read long after i am gone, and might help others in some way...when they read from someone who has been there.

    | Posted on 2011-04-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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