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    dots Submission Name: Over dosed past and presentdots
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    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 119
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    dotsOver dosed past and presentdots
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    Falling in the depths
    of hatred, with your
    taunting smile bringing
    me down.
    The air from my screams
    is muted from mortal minds.
    The blade in which you carve,
    upon my ripped wrist, brings little
    substitute for what is missed.
    Melted within these wounds
    is the chaos in which I see.
    My inner soul clawing it's way
    to hopeful over-take.
    As the blood and tears mingle
    and mix a new breed of life comes forth.
    The human me in which I am
    pushes back the inner hate.
    A battle of life and mind games
    ends within the ink,
    as all I write pours the insanity
    of my over dosed past and present.




    Submitted on 2011-02-06 18:45:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Makes me think of the muse "which is mightier, the pen or the sword"? May your pen always be constructive, and may your muse take you to writing world class work!!
    | Posted on 2011-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      i actaully thought this was going to be about something completely different, your title is very misleading, but not in a bad way. good write
    | Posted on 2011-02-07 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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