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    dots Submission Name: Look Updots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLook Updots
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    Plan to be ignorant
    Contemplate being lost
    Strive to be helpless
    Defer love's very cost

    And haunt the ghosts
    With their blind glare
    Trample the heavens with
    A cold shoulder of care

    Trust you'll disappoint
    Fake every lie
    Come forward to retreat
    Give up when you try

    Stumble while you balance
    Both feet in the air
    Watch while you leave
    When you are not there

    Erase what is missing
    Create what you see
    Struggle to stay here
    This place with misery

    And I know I'm not your tears
    And I'm sure I'm not your smile
    As everything comes together
    But I'll be around for awhile




    Submitted on 2011-02-06 20:21:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed the duality in the lines of this poem. Its challenge and intensity was like ecstasy to me. "Trample the heavens with
    A cold shoulder of care" was my favorite line.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by Seraphim X | [ Reply to This ]


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