Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Look Updots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 623
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 795



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLook Updots
    -------------------------------------------


    Plan to be ignorant
    Contemplate being lost
    Strive to be helpless
    Defer love's very cost

    And haunt the ghosts
    With their blind glare
    Trample the heavens with
    A cold shoulder of care

    Trust you'll disappoint
    Fake every lie
    Come forward to retreat
    Give up when you try

    Stumble while you balance
    Both feet in the air
    Watch while you leave
    When you are not there

    Erase what is missing
    Create what you see
    Struggle to stay here
    This place with misery

    And I know I'm not your tears
    And I'm sure I'm not your smile
    As everything comes together
    But I'll be around for awhile




    Submitted on 2011-02-06 20:21:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed the duality in the lines of this poem. Its challenge and intensity was like ecstasy to me. "Trample the heavens with
    A cold shoulder of care" was my favorite line.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2011-02-06 00:00:00 | by Seraphim X | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    189259

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Linger written by saartha
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    untitled written by Chelebel
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    To written by SavedDragon
    Incubus written by monad
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Bond written by saartha
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry