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conversations #34


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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conversations #34



it seems like

all of the beautiful women

have (darkness)



someone (follows me)



already. (everywhere.)

everyone (i am)

is holding hands

or (a shadow) smiling.



i try not to be (in this world)

jealous (without a form)



when i see this

(i float through crowds)

but i am (unseen)



in some ways

i'm (like a ghost)

fortunate (without a body.)

i suppose.




Submitted on 2011-02-07 17:00:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this style of yours with the parenthesis. I just thought it's supposed to represent two different voices while reading it but looking at it closely I see you actually merged two poems into one. That's no small feat, I wish I would of thought of doing something like that...
| Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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