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    dots Submission Name: conversations #34dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsconversations #34dots
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    it seems like

    all of the beautiful women

    have (darkness)



    someone (follows me)



    already. (everywhere.)

    everyone (i am)

    is holding hands

    or (a shadow) smiling.



    i try not to be (in this world)

    jealous (without a form)



    when i see this

    (i float through crowds)

    but i am (unseen)



    in some ways

    i'm (like a ghost)

    fortunate (without a body.)

    i suppose.




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      I like this style of yours with the parenthesis. I just thought it's supposed to represent two different voices while reading it but looking at it closely I see you actually merged two poems into one. That's no small feat, I wish I would of thought of doing something like that...
    | Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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