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    dots Submission Name: conversations #38dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsconversations #38dots
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    now the drunk girls

    tease (my darker side)



    an old man (keeps resurfacing)

    looking for attention.

    (when i write.)



    sugarcoating (dark clouds)

    their voices (have moved in.)



    and flirting meanly

    (there may be no hope.)

    because there is no hope.




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      Ha, I enjoyed the pub atmosphere this poem has. Good one.
    | Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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