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conversations #40

Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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conversations #40

if i could only explain

(the deep ocean creatures

of) myself

(your eyes drown out) better

(the shallowness of others.)

at the right moments.

(with a single

watery look)

i'm often lost

for words

and (ancient bricks

of layered coral)

my mouth

won't make the sounds

(that flow out

through your salty lips,)

that say i need you

(flood the room)

because i'm better off

with you

(with your lovely brine)

i thought i would be. (made

from the skeletons

of a million discarded fish.)

Submitted on 2011-02-07 17:22:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "if I could only explain
(the deep ocean creatures
of) myself"

is just a killer opening. I've noticed that a recurring theme is relating your self to fish, & I find this so intriguing, & here it is again, presenting itself. I'm curious about this. Is there are reason? Is it just a natural simulation? I'd love to know.

"(with your lovely brine)" is also a great line. Your page is like a gold mine or some archeological dig. I want to treasure each poem, but also handle them with care.
| Posted on 2011-02-10 00:00:00 | by Santi | [ Reply to This ]

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