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conversations #41


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
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Words: 71
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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conversations #41



one day

(in the bluish aftermath)

is just like all of the others,



(i will remember living)

people and places

(somehow) becoming a blur.



it's been (a good life)

like a dream

(where i loved

you all)

when i was a child

(in my own way.)

and the edges

were so undefined.




Submitted on 2011-02-08 17:10:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey, it's nice to see some familiar names still posting on this site. I haven't logged in to this place for ages. I really like this poem of yours, especially the last two lines. I haven't written much in the last years but I searched through my old poems and found one worthy to post here. It's called Hologram. Check it out, maybe you like it. I will try to write again and post some newer stuff here...
| Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  This is the first work of yours I have read, and there is something beautiful and sparse about it.

It can be harder to say things simply in a poetic way than it is to say them flowery and overblown, though I must confess I love these pieces too.

There is an unquestioning ache lurking here beyond your words, upon finishing there was a slight disappointment, not because I felt it was unfinished, but because I wanted to know more, if that makes sense.

Glad I stopped by.
| Posted on 2011-02-17 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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