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    dots Submission Name: conversations #41dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsconversations #41dots
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    one day

    (in the bluish aftermath)

    is just like all of the others,



    (i will remember living)

    people and places

    (somehow) becoming a blur.



    it's been (a good life)

    like a dream

    (where i loved

    you all)

    when i was a child

    (in my own way.)

    and the edges

    were so undefined.




    Submitted on 2011-02-08 17:10:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey, it's nice to see some familiar names still posting on this site. I haven't logged in to this place for ages. I really like this poem of yours, especially the last two lines. I haven't written much in the last years but I searched through my old poems and found one worthy to post here. It's called Hologram. Check it out, maybe you like it. I will try to write again and post some newer stuff here...
    | Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the first work of yours I have read, and there is something beautiful and sparse about it.

    It can be harder to say things simply in a poetic way than it is to say them flowery and overblown, though I must confess I love these pieces too.

    There is an unquestioning ache lurking here beyond your words, upon finishing there was a slight disappointment, not because I felt it was unfinished, but because I wanted to know more, if that makes sense.

    Glad I stopped by.
    | Posted on 2011-02-17 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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