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    dots Submission Name: Flawlessdots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    26/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 162/239/241
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsFlawlessdots
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    You see this flawless face,
    With this flawless smile,
    But in reality… it’s all a flawless mask.

    I saw your eyes a wandering,
    I felt the tension building,
    And then you dropped my world… into a flawless oblivion.

    You hear my voice, you hear my words,
    But nothing of it makes sense to you-
    Don’t you know? It’s all a flawless lie.

    I know you, I know your ways,
    And everything you do? I see through.
    It’s nothing but a flawless act.

    I felt my love was perfect,
    I felt everything was true,
    But you were just another player… flawless in your game.

    I may have fell for it then,
    I may have believed in you then,
    But my dream is flawless now… without you there to ruin it.




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      Rings a bell to me about having a range or particular amount of success that the flawed game player who does not have the ante up on what karma can do to you for unraveling a level of trickery on someone.

    It says: I made it, untouchable from you now.
    So far away and gone that I have the last laugh that you bear witness and you must accept that you can do nothing else to respond further to the rebound freedom.

    I am flawless as though it heals every single thing you ever did to me or gave me a wrong conclusion of.

    What an issue indeed.
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      it usually seems that all the things we wish werent true are 100% flawless, lies, cheating, jealousy, anger, hurt. their all perfect in their own little way. good write
    | Posted on 2011-02-09 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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