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What happened?

Author: extrEMO
ASL Info:    18. Ima guy. NC
Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 77 /57 /29
Words: 117
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Average Vote:    4.6667
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Yea so my parents are divorced now )=
At least i found something real to write about.

What happened?

What happened to my family?
We weren't doing all that bad.
Then my mom left randomly.
Like she's not good enough for my dad.

Now I'm stuck with the bitch.
Every night and day.
Until the weekend comes,
Then I go away.

Hopefully a friend is there,
So i can get the hell out.
If nobody is available,
I leave to scream and shout.

Fighting back the tears to write this,
And the rhymes are hard to find.
Each and every time,
Its hard to finish a line.

Nobody will ever understand or know,
Just why the bitch went away.
I just know its a living hell with her,
Every night and day.

Submitted on 2011-02-08 20:17:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thats sad and pretty frank!!!
| Posted on 2011-02-14 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this poem, its cool that you managed to make it rhyme (I couldn't). I can relate, especially to having a [censored] for a mom too. Good work.
| Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by Undead37 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love your work!! :D
| Posted on 2011-02-11 00:00:00 | by springwaltz08 | [ Reply to This ]
  very painful. I can relate to this in a smilar way.
Very well writen. I liked this poem.
very emotional.
keep up the good work.

| Posted on 2011-02-08 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]

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