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    dots Submission Name: Building Blocksdots

    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/806/391
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 660
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsBuilding Blocksdots

    I'm crying, dying, slowly trying
    To build what you tore down
    I'm living, smiling, breathing
    With the new life I found
    Anticipated my long escape
    Finally I took that chance
    Now in a better place
    And not looking back
    You destroyed my life
    Made it harder to recover
    You built lies
    And now they're over
    You made me believe
    I was ugly, a fake, a creep
    When in fact
    You weren't talking about me
    You were reflecting yourself
    And for that moment I believed
    It was me, it was me
    But it never was, never will
    I am greater than you have ever said
    The pride I had you once killed
    Is lying with you in the bed
    Oh wait it's empty, no ones there
    Never was, never will be
    And I don't care
    Now I loosen the chains
    Broke the locks
    The real me remains
    As I'm building blocks...


    Submitted on 2011-02-10 08:29:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OMG... Is all I can say I fully enjoyed reading this poem is the best one i have seen on here and I am looking forard to reading more of your posts.
    | Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by JAILBYRD22 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol'ing at the comment above me.. you show great strength in your piece, its always harder to get back up after you've been pushed down and around repeatedly. good write
    | Posted on 2011-02-10 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      That was good. The word flow was seemless. I got divorced and used poetry to vent out. I would have choked her if I didn't write my feelings down, lol. j/k. But really, this was some thought provoking and enlightening material.
    | Posted on 2011-02-10 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]

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