first off, wow. deep stuff, real deep. i like that. sense of loss of control, yet you still know what's happening, still conscious. hm... reminds me of senior year. congrats, you've found your way to my fav list.
First off, I liked the first stanza of only 2 lines. It kind of stands out like a bold statement of prologue. It really sets the tone for what is to come. Clever. I also wanted to acknowledge the subtle rhyme scheme that transcends the individual stanza's to encompass the entire work. Not obvious, but enough to spice the work up. This is one of those poems that you really don't capture all of the beauty with just one read. It takes a few times through to notice the subtleties within. Much like a woman I suppose.