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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    heartbreak what can i say?
    seems like it always ends this way
    i fall hard everytime
    its takes me longer to get back up with every blow
    i just want to give up let it all go
    fall to my knees
    hoping this pain will fade
    my heart wont ever be remade
    im broken into so may pieces
    losing myself with every break
    its like im always making the same mistakes
    as if its always going to be my fate
    heartbreak does it always have to end this way?
    i wish i could just get away...





    Submitted on 2011-02-11 06:34:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! I have felt like this so ,many times. its as if you were reading my mind...years ago of course. Now I am, happyly married to a great guy. thanks for sharing this was a really great poem. A favorite
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    | Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]


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