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    dots Submission Name: A Smile from an angel dots
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    Author: TalentedChild
    ASL Info:    17
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 19/81/106
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Smile from an angel dots
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    My precious soft sweet angel
    With wings so soft and light
    Is in a place called heaven,
    away from me tonight

    Her wind is the whisper
    and her eyes are what I see
    Continue walking
    through the gardens of hope
    I see her look at me
    I glance above the clouds
    And imagine her smiling down at me


    Heat of the sunrise
    as the morning wakes
    the gentle relief that hits me
    when i see her fragile face


    the image of her beauty
    distracts me with such power
    shes as gentle as a dove and about as soft as a flower

    what it’d be like for her to hear me
    sing every song
    speak every word
    be able to just feel free

    i can hope that god will let her dreams come true
    and that the north star will guide me
    that when it comes to lifes hard times he'll know where to find me.

    For Her wind is the whisper
    and her eyes are what I see
    I glance above the clouds
    And she is smiling down on me.




    Submitted on 2011-02-11 11:22:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Quite beautiful and a must fav for me. The one bump I came upon is
    "shes as gentle as a dove and about as soft as a flower" where she's needs the apostrophe and I feel that the word "about" is unnecessary to this and adds a little drag.
    | Posted on 2011-02-11 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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