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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just a random poem thrown together..


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    The blood that runs along my arm feels warm the smell is sweet the taste is intoxicating...The blade feels so smooth as it slides across my skin. A rush of adrenalin washes over me in a swift swoop and I'm left almost breathless. Never thought it would come to this. Never thought I would hurt so much.

    I never thought I would love you the way I did. I got so wrapped up in the way you made me feel that I forgot to protect myself and you got the best of me. In a moments notice I went from feeling on top of the world to feeling like nothing.

    We had good times together which is why I don't understand why were through. Which brings me to my current state.




    Submitted on 2011-02-12 01:24:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked how you described the nuances of your condition... blood feeling warm, intoxicating,sweet.... breathlessness... and finally how you reached here.
    | Posted on 2011-02-14 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW!!!!!!!! I am speechless this poem is purr-fectly written and I likes so much.
    You have very great talent.

    thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]


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