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    dots Submission Name: Bedtime Thoughtsdots
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    Author: Dalelord
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 22/23/8
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBedtime Thoughtsdots
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    Placid, yet rivetting with its intricat shape
    Is the wall of my chamber, I am trying to sleep
    Staring into wonders, which its imperfections behold
    The visions are clear, as the paint is artistically old
    What is their reason, the knots, scratches and dents,
    To tell me a reason?
    I'm certain its not what they're meant
    Shadows tell a story paint blotches write a song
    If only these could tell me, what I've done right,
    and what I've done wrong




    Submitted on 2004-07-28 01:26:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ah, wall gazing! ever put those sticky glow in the dark stars on the walls and just get lost in the oblivion of thought, making your own own constellations?

    i have insomnia so i know what you're going through... as long as you're using your time like this, you'll be alright!

    reflections after a long day... decisions were carelessly made or too hard thought over... *sigh* ... good thing there's always tomorrow to look forward to.
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by EmeraldJealousy | [ Reply to This ]
      The mind seems to kick into overdrive right when you want it to shut up doesn't it? Hopefully I'm not the only one who finds it almost impossible to sleep with my mind always running full tilt. Anyways, a good solid poem with some good word usage and visuals, my mind was filled with vivid images as I read this. Nothing to criticise so keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by ACircuitShock | [ Reply to This ]


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