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    dots Submission Name: Trustdots
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    Author: Transcendancing
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 365/214/35
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 316
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Inspired, bizarrely enough, but the chiropractor... or the going to...


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    Languid sleepy limbs,
    Half lidded ambience,
    Reality slightly blurred.
    Flesh quivers with anticipation…
    Rises and responds to touch.
    Dissociative understanding…
    Falling into wealth of trust,
    Spiralling outward –
    Mingling space and time.
    Returning to sharp, shapes and light
    Unwilling of movement,
    Reluctant of spirit
    Laying prose with replete
    Curved satisfaction.




    Submitted on 2004-07-28 01:33:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice work. The use of words here is very good and sets the tone effectively. It put me in a mellow mood, and that's the mood to be in.
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      Boy do I love the chriopractor. I really need to go for a visit. This poem seems to hold other things than just a trip to the chropractor though. I can see how it relates. But it can also be used to describe other emotions, other stories.
    I liked it!
    good work
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      i love freestyle poetry. no boundries whatsoever. its a nice pieces, albeit hard to follow the first time through. you've found a way to my fav's. check out some of my works when u get the chance.
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      At first I couldn't see how this piece could possibly have been inspired a chiropractor, but after a couple more reads it became clear. Its nice when I have to read stuff more than once to get what I want out of it, thanks for that. Anyway, like ACircuit, I think you should visit this chiropractor more often if makes you produce work like, great job!
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      Inspired by a chiropractor eh? If the chiropractor gives you the use of that amazing word choice then I should start going if for that reason alone. Seriously, great poem with beautiful visuals and beauty in language. Nothing to criticise and no tips to give, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-07-28 00:00:00 | by ACircuitShock | [ Reply to This ]



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