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    dots Submission Name: When you stopped loving medots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       this just happened so its still rough and raw but i had to get something out, i can't stand the pain...so plz don't be to hard if its really bad


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    dotsWhen you stopped loving medots
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    This wasnt something I saw coming,
    Not something I knew to prevent.
    You left my house claiming you would be back,
    But all I got was a phone call from you.

    Telling me you didnt love me no more,
    With the same emotion youd tell an order.
    No care for how I felt, nothing to calm me.
    You couldnt even do this is person.

    What kind of man stops loving someone?
    In less than a week but doesnt have respect,
    You couldnt even talk to me in person,
    Didnt even try to make me understand.

    All you ever cared about was the drugs,
    Said you werent hooked but I knew different.
    Every time I talked to you, it was the same.
    Oh I cant come out Im busy, and youd never call.

    If you did come out it was only late night,
    And youd be gone in the morning,
    Tell me why would you think this was ok?
    What part of relationship is that?
    Because I must be real dense,
    To think this was wrong.

    After all this time, you say you stopped,
    What really happened, what dont I know?
    Or I should be asking what her name is?
    But no youd never do that to me,

    When you stopped loving me,
    I hurt, started crying and havent stopped
    I cant even tell you how much I broke,
    I cant even tell you how I feel,
    All I am is numb since you stopped loving me.




    Submitted on 2011-02-14 03:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice poem,,, one can feel the pain in the words.
    | Posted on 2011-02-14 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


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