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    dots Submission Name: Stupiddots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 590/805/389
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsStupiddots
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    I woke up this morning with despair
    To wake up and you're not there
    An anger I can no longer hold
    Unfortunate for you

    This is happening all the time
    Is this a pattern or a sign
    Keep telling me everything's fine
    Think I'm that stupid

    Do you really think
    That I'm falling for this shit
    Oh baby please
    I've been through it
    Get off your knees
    You look stupid

    Is it me or her
    Tell me the worst
    I know we're through
    And yes it hurts

    But if this is what you want
    This is what you will get
    Just know there's no turning back
    Stupid...

    S.H.




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      despair and then cold cold anger... and a precise mind
    in the place of where there would only be heat to burn off the despair to keep going for another day
    then at the end, almost a sense of acceptance

    overall, an image of a really pissed woman...
    after the first stanza i had this image of a woman saying the words tight-lipped and almost spitting the words out in contempt to the person that she is addressing... but in the end, the last word "Stupid..." feels more like a sigh, evoking images of her giving chances before and it not being treasured. the stupid feels like it is directed to both the partner and herself

    at first look the poem seems simple but then again, some of the best things are simple
    i perceive that there is more depth to it than what meets the eye but then i might be wrong and just rambling aimlessly correct me if i said anything wrong
    | Posted on 2011-02-15 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]


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