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    dots Submission Name: Shattered in piecesdots

    Author: angelagresham19
    ASL Info:    18-Female Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    0.61 - 66/32/42
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Story/Love
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    dotsShattered in piecesdots

    One morning you told me to call you tonight i knew something was not right but in our 7th hour class we wrote notes then you said to call you tonight. that when i knew you were going to break my heart but i called you anyway. when i called you you said i love you but it over that you couldn't take it anymore all the drama, lies that was going on so i said you don't have the same feeling for me that had before you said that you did that we would get back together later in life my heart shattered in to pieces over and over thinking that it was all just dreams
    I thought we'd be forever and always like you said But you can only go for so long i thought i could trust you with my heart all i know it that i will always love you know matter what happens i never knew i could hurt like this i never knew what was love till met you.

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    ||| Comments |||
      Grammer is one of the biggest things on this writing.
    People tell me that you need a flew... no. you don't.

    Do me a favore. I want you to re-write this poem. but I want it to be an inside poem. where it sounds like your talking about one thing and leads you to the truth.

    It will take you a little time, but if you need some help, email me.

    but I've read a few others and they have great meanings but you need to work on your grammar. once you've complete that, you'll have some GREAT poetry.
    | Posted on 2013-05-05 00:00:00 | by jjd | [ Reply to This ]
      try more punctuations cos without them i lose breath when reading..lol. it sure is honest though.
    | Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      Totally honest.... love is the most self contradictory thing in the world.
    | Posted on 2011-02-20 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]

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