Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Shattered in piecesdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: angelagresham19
    ASL Info:    18-Female Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    0.61 - 66/32/42
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Story/Love
    Total Views: 646
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 863



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsShattered in piecesdots
    -------------------------------------------


    One morning you told me to call you tonight i knew something was not right but in our 7th hour class we wrote notes then you said to call you tonight. that when i knew you were going to break my heart but i called you anyway. when i called you you said i love you but it over that you couldn't take it anymore all the drama, lies that was going on so i said you don't have the same feeling for me that had before you said that you did that we would get back together later in life my heart shattered in to pieces over and over thinking that it was all just dreams
    I thought we'd be forever and always like you said But you can only go for so long i thought i could trust you with my heart all i know it that i will always love you know matter what happens i never knew i could hurt like this i never knew what was love till met you.




    Submitted on 2011-02-18 12:28:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Grammer is one of the biggest things on this writing.
    People tell me that you need a flew... no. you don't.

    Do me a favore. I want you to re-write this poem. but I want it to be an inside poem. where it sounds like your talking about one thing and leads you to the truth.

    It will take you a little time, but if you need some help, email me.
    jdb9878@gmail.com

    but I've read a few others and they have great meanings but you need to work on your grammar. once you've complete that, you'll have some GREAT poetry.
    | Posted on 2013-05-05 00:00:00 | by jjd | [ Reply to This ]
      try more punctuations cos without them i lose breath when reading..lol. it sure is honest though.
    | Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      Totally honest.... love is the most self contradictory thing in the world.
    | Posted on 2011-02-20 00:00:00 | by ShiveringFire | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    189511

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Still Perfectly Flawed written by armand
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (1) written by endlessgame23
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    prison written by ShyOne
    i've missed written by mysalvation

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry